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Post the first line of the last 20 (or less, if you haven't written that many) stories you've written and see if there is a pattern.
1.* (This story hasn't been posted to LJ yet, so it may change after the beta process.) There were literally thousands of problems demanding Cortana's attention.
2. John twirled the coin the stranger gave him during recess between his fingers.
3. This is perfect, John thought as he leaned back, looking at the waves rolled onto the beautiful Hawaiian beach in front of him.
4. It hadn't been this tense in the mess hall since Theresa, the head chef on Atlantis, made her famous Chicken Pot Pie and there was only enough servings for half of the expedition.
5. John looked out one of the numerous windows of the Cairo station, looking at the vast expanse of the Pacific Ocean.
6. The heat of the sun was nearly as unforgiving as the Taliban.
7. Twenty-three Spartans killed.
8. They weren't in the mess hall.
9. No one on the ship had any idea the two of them were doing this in her quarters.
10. John was a dead man.
11. He had failed.
12. She was still as beautiful as she was ten years ago.
13. "They weren't playing fair," Cortana said angrily, her voice filling the Chief's ears.
14. John Sheppard woke up with a splitting headache and a strong desire to kill Rodney.
15. "You were right."
16. He should have realized it was too easy.
17. Of all the things Teyla expected to see on Atlantis, nothing could have prepared her for the sight that sat before her.
18. I watch Walter walk into the cluttered room, somehow missing knocking over one of his experiments as his brain is preoccupied with his random thoughts.
19. "Katana warned me about you."
20. If John lived in a world of black and white, the decision to tell Teyla how much she meant to him would be a clear one.
Well, I like using pronouns or names...only one of the sentences don't have either one. LOL
And I obviously don't like starting a story with quotes because only four stories began with a quote and two of them were more hooks than anything else. And I don't like to start my stories with the same word twice, LOL...only three words were copied John (4 times), he (2 times) and they (2 times).
Oh wait, I'm suppose to be looking for patterns...not anti-ones, LOL.
The one thing I'm surprised by is the lack of hooks. I spent a long time in newspaper and one of the most important things I learned was the importance to draw in the reader....I'd give myself a 50% for hooks, not that good. I guess that's what I get for writing my stories backwards (I always start with the last sentence of my story before I even bother starting to write...it's kind of like knowing where the finish line is before you start a race.)
On a side note, wow, I really haven't written a lot of stories lately. I had to go back over a year to find 20 stories that I have written.
comm_phoenix's LJ and had to do it myself...Post the first line of the last 20 (or less, if you haven't written that many) stories you've written and see if there is a pattern.
1.* (This story hasn't been posted to LJ yet, so it may change after the beta process.) There were literally thousands of problems demanding Cortana's attention.
2. John twirled the coin the stranger gave him during recess between his fingers.
3. This is perfect, John thought as he leaned back, looking at the waves rolled onto the beautiful Hawaiian beach in front of him.
4. It hadn't been this tense in the mess hall since Theresa, the head chef on Atlantis, made her famous Chicken Pot Pie and there was only enough servings for half of the expedition.
5. John looked out one of the numerous windows of the Cairo station, looking at the vast expanse of the Pacific Ocean.
6. The heat of the sun was nearly as unforgiving as the Taliban.
7. Twenty-three Spartans killed.
8. They weren't in the mess hall.
9. No one on the ship had any idea the two of them were doing this in her quarters.
10. John was a dead man.
11. He had failed.
12. She was still as beautiful as she was ten years ago.
13. "They weren't playing fair," Cortana said angrily, her voice filling the Chief's ears.
14. John Sheppard woke up with a splitting headache and a strong desire to kill Rodney.
15. "You were right."
16. He should have realized it was too easy.
17. Of all the things Teyla expected to see on Atlantis, nothing could have prepared her for the sight that sat before her.
18. I watch Walter walk into the cluttered room, somehow missing knocking over one of his experiments as his brain is preoccupied with his random thoughts.
19. "Katana warned me about you."
20. If John lived in a world of black and white, the decision to tell Teyla how much she meant to him would be a clear one.
Well, I like using pronouns or names...only one of the sentences don't have either one. LOL
And I obviously don't like starting a story with quotes because only four stories began with a quote and two of them were more hooks than anything else. And I don't like to start my stories with the same word twice, LOL...only three words were copied John (4 times), he (2 times) and they (2 times).
Oh wait, I'm suppose to be looking for patterns...not anti-ones, LOL.
The one thing I'm surprised by is the lack of hooks. I spent a long time in newspaper and one of the most important things I learned was the importance to draw in the reader....I'd give myself a 50% for hooks, not that good. I guess that's what I get for writing my stories backwards (I always start with the last sentence of my story before I even bother starting to write...it's kind of like knowing where the finish line is before you start a race.)
On a side note, wow, I really haven't written a lot of stories lately. I had to go back over a year to find 20 stories that I have written.
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