So I have this sentence and it's driving me crazy because I'm pretty sure any use of --, is generally frowned upon by the grammar gods. Maybe not, but I'd thought I would pick my f-list's brains to see if you guys think this is grammatically correct:
Despite his turmoil of emotions --something that should have never affected him while he was behind enemy lines --, John was relieved at the silence.
I'm pretty sure it should be something like:
Despite his turmoil of emotions, something that should have never affected him while he was behind enemy lines, John was relieved at the silence.
But, ugh, it doesn't have the impact that I'm looking for. Nothing is better than the use of -- to show the narrator's interjected explanatory (yes, I stole that wording from dictionary.com) on a particular subject. And despite my love for them when I am making a post here, parentheses are not an option here.
So, what do y'all think?
Despite his turmoil of emotions --something that should have never affected him while he was behind enemy lines --, John was relieved at the silence.
I'm pretty sure it should be something like:
Despite his turmoil of emotions, something that should have never affected him while he was behind enemy lines, John was relieved at the silence.
But, ugh, it doesn't have the impact that I'm looking for. Nothing is better than the use of -- to show the narrator's interjected explanatory (yes, I stole that wording from dictionary.com) on a particular subject. And despite my love for them when I am making a post here, parentheses are not an option here.
So, what do y'all think?
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